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1 First try out on Thu Feb 21, 2008 5:28 am

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" NO WAIT! Don't take her!" Says Hunter pointlessly as they take his love one away. "Why are you doing this! please...d..don't...!"


Hunter left for death, he hopelessly tried saving his loved one from vile entities, Hunter powerless could only stay there looking as they took the life of his loved one, he in the brink of death with his whole body filled with an unforgiving pain was trying move but it was futile, he was paralysed from the pain. "Is this the boy?" said an ominous sounding voice. "Take him he could be worthy text subject" Hunter tried looking at the man but the callous and vile darkness in the room made it impossible for him to see him he could only see the man's smirk and the faint look of his evil looking eyes.
After enduring so much pain Hunter finally gave out and fainted.....


This is my first try if you like what you read then I'll continue it if not then I'll try over, remember try and see the concept in this as the grammar and writing can always be change, oh and this is is not finish this is like the prologue....

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2 Re: First try out on Thu Feb 28, 2008 1:07 am

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thats sad man sniff Y!!!!!


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3 Re: First try out on Thu Feb 28, 2008 1:37 am

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are you serious? I though it was idk sucky?... I didn't like it... and I freaking wrote it...

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4 Re: First try out on Thu Feb 28, 2008 12:17 pm

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RIP OFF!!!!


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Half Elf: "What possible value does one burdened to exist with cursed blood have?... Sometimes running away is the one way to save yourself... Humans are so arrogant.

Do you have the dragon balls to do it?

I'm only human. I have the right to change my mind at any given moment without reason.
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5 Re: First try out on Thu Feb 28, 2008 5:07 pm

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you know I only notice when I you actually said it, that's when I notice why I didn't like what I wrote...

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6 Re: First try out on Thu Feb 28, 2008 7:36 pm

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i hope that the story is different and better then that cuz that was like shadow said a rip off

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7 Re: First try out on Thu Feb 28, 2008 8:22 pm

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if you know it's a rip off, from what did I took it?

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8 Re: First try out on Fri Feb 29, 2008 1:59 am

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I said sad cuz it remembers me from some animes and I think movies.


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9 Re: First try out on Fri Feb 29, 2008 3:34 pm

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This so reminds me of *********. The guy's past. I dunno if you were in your right mind or when writing I just simply don't care. Like Youkai said if you keep going make it better than that stupid ending the anime had.


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"No creature is born with the sole purpose of dying." "Trust is an easy thing to destroy, but it can take a long time to built."


Half Elf: "What possible value does one burdened to exist with cursed blood have?... Sometimes running away is the one way to save yourself... Humans are so arrogant.

Do you have the dragon balls to do it?

I'm only human. I have the right to change my mind at any given moment without reason.
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10 Re: First try out on Fri Feb 29, 2008 4:40 pm

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didn't you notice that when the anime ended I started hating it?

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11 Re: First try out on Sat Mar 01, 2008 9:02 am

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Well F U for censoring me and hmm I didn't notice. It had to end one way or the other I just think the fight with the girl was lame. How the hell did she beat him?! And they "fighting" in the end was lame too... no kissing scene >_<'


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"No creature is born with the sole purpose of dying." "Trust is an easy thing to destroy, but it can take a long time to built."


Half Elf: "What possible value does one burdened to exist with cursed blood have?... Sometimes running away is the one way to save yourself... Humans are so arrogant.

Do you have the dragon balls to do it?

I'm only human. I have the right to change my mind at any given moment without reason.
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12 Re: First try out on Mon Mar 03, 2008 12:12 am

Selfier

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exactly and exactly


oh and this is not america so you can't do wathever you want...

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13 Re: First try out on Mon Mar 03, 2008 12:48 am

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Then where is it? I'm confused.

Freedom is not free ya.
Memories are good but that's all they are.


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"No creature is born with the sole purpose of dying." "Trust is an easy thing to destroy, but it can take a long time to built."


Half Elf: "What possible value does one burdened to exist with cursed blood have?... Sometimes running away is the one way to save yourself... Humans are so arrogant.

Do you have the dragon balls to do it?

I'm only human. I have the right to change my mind at any given moment without reason.
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14 Re: First try out on Mon Mar 03, 2008 9:43 pm

Selfier

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ummm the internet...

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15 Re: First try out on Tue Mar 04, 2008 12:58 am

Nobody000

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america is actualy not as much of a free country as people say.....


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